Thesis: Ultimatley, these used copies show us the true meaning behind the text, Pamela which is the importance of her maintaining her virtue.
Topic Sentence 1: The first used copy of text that I am using is published by W.W. Norton & Company. INC and it was published in 1958
Topic Sentence 2: If we focus on the image this can help us understand more about the text, Pamela. The Image on this cover shows a young man approaching a young lady.
Topic Sentence 3: This cover is suggesting a specific target audience, which are the young ladies that should not be fooled because if you really look at the cover the young lady is the main focus of the cover since she is more full of color and this young lady has a smile on her face but it is like she is saying thank you but no thank you at the same time.
Topic Sentence 4: The second used copy of text that I am using is published by Penguin Classics and it was published in 1985.
Topic Sentence 5: The image on this cover, once more have only two people on it. A young man is kind of forcing himself onto to the young lady on the cover.
Topic Sentence 6: This cover is suggesting a specific target audience, which are to the people that are stuck in violent situation like Pamela.
Source: It is like the cover itself just wanted to give me a message of what is expected in which I believe should be the main purpose of the cover. Angus Phillips, agrees that the cover of a book serves a purpose, ” The cover or jacket od a book conveys a message about the contents of a volume, influencing both the reatiler who stocks the book and the potential purchaser in the shop” which is the reason I was drawn to this copy because it transmitted a message to me of the book.
Your thesis is missing an important element, so you should specify what caused you to believe that the copies showcased the idea of the female character being virtuous. This will help you to shape a stronger argument.
The topic sentences should be a little more detailed, especially 1-2 and 4-6. Expanding on the ideas in your topic sentence will help you to be more analytical since the covers are being used to make connections.
In you’re thesis you should argue more about how the copies you used showed a hidden text of the importance of Pamela maintaining her virtue.
Your topic sentences should focus on you’re argumentative claims and not just yore focus points about the material.
I like you’re source, it relates to what you want to talk about and seems to have a good transition with an explanation as to why the quote was relevant to your topic.
Building on your peers’ comments:
Thesis: you have the so-what factor but not the thesis (argument) this is supporting
Topic sentences:
1 and 4: These are observations. What you do have to say about these covers? Remove the first person structure to make a stronger, more argumentative point (also true for your use of source)
2: Answer the question of what the cover “can help us understand more about the text” instead of leaving it vague.
3: You’re getting there, but this needs revising at the sentence and argument level. I think you mean “culturally- or socially aware” or savvy women, rather than “who should not be fooled”, as the latter is broad and unclear. Remove the use of second person (“you”).
5: Needs argumentative claim
6: This is a claim! Explain in the paragraph how the cover accomplishes this and what is argues about the novel’s (unintentional?) depiction of rape culture